Breianna 100WC – Week 31

Just me in the dark and misty woods all alone not know where I was. But then suddenly I fell in a trap and sooner or later I was taken out of the trap, that I was in for hours. Not thinking at all I ran to a door and opened it but to my horror I saw a big bee, as big as a house with two men. One was poking the bee and the other well he was taking photos of the bee. The bee was dead to my relief but then it was suddenly flying to me.

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  1. Hi Breianna,
    Thank you for your 100 Word Challenge story. It was very fast-paced and exciting, well done! You used some excellent description to make sure your reader knew exactly what things looked like.
    I was really impressed by all the time connectives you used here, as it meant I knew exactly when things happened and in what order.
    Next time, could you read your work back to yourself to check it makes sense? I’m not sure the first sentence makes sense.

    Keep up the good work!
    Mr Hyde
    Team 100WC
    Willoughby, Lincolnshire, England

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